MaryB1

...believe that teenagers do not worry about...

...teenagers do not have to worry about...

You have to write 2 sentences at least in each paragraph.

You have written only one sentence in each paragraph.

You have to write more examples and explanations.

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Some people belevies that teenagers haven't worry about plastic polution.But is this realy true?However not everyone agrees.

 On the one hand we have the opinion that teenagers hve to worry about the plastic polution too because they are human too and all together we are tring to save the planet.

On the ather hand we have the opinion that teenagers haven't to about the plastic polution too because the are worring about other thnks like exams,grades and other thinks.

To sum up it is true that teenagers have a lot of worries but they are humans too like the adults so they must cary about the planet.

You need more examples and explanations!

Always use the plan and the notes we wrote in the student's book.

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Dear editor,

I am writing about the plan to build a pool at our school in cafeteria.As a student i think is a bad idea.

 First of all we wil not have a place to eat.Also if soamething hapend in our food, we will need cafeteria to buy new food.

 In coclusion is a bad idea so please do not build it there.

 Yoursfaithfully

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Such sweet things you have to say about your grandpa!

Pay attention to spelling mistakes!

When we say humans, we mean our species. We use the word "people"

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Pay attention to spelling mistakes!

In Paragraph 2 you should have written about the plot as well.

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  Harry Potter and the deathly hallows part2 is an excided adventure,fantasy film.It is based on a book written by Jk Rolling.

  The story takes place in a school on a wizard word.There are 5 main characters:Harry Potter,Ronald Weasly,Hermione Grager,Draco Malfoy and Lord Voldemort.

  One of the best things in film is the fight between Voldemort and Harry.The performance of the film it is wonderful.

  Harry Potter and the deathly hallows part2 is one of the best films I have ever seen.The film is for teenagers but funs of Harry Potter will enjoy every minuit of the movie.

I personally approve of this film

When i was born, a lot of pepole come to welcome me in the world.But of all those pepole i admire the most my grandpa.

  Let me tell about him.He is a knowlege human.He is kind and funny.

My grandpa is the human who taught me what i know untill my age.He is the human who played whith me the most of all parts of my familly.

 What makes a good granpa?The loyalty,the patience and the teaching.For example when i was younger he was learning me alot of things.He was come at my home at 10:00 and he was leaving at 8:00 am.When i was Ill he was all the day with me

 Υnfortunately, he got a lot of health problems and can no longer come often for that I go to him.

He is my favorite person on my life and i dont want lose him

You started with a different sentence!

Generally good use of past tenses.

Try not to translate from Greek to English.

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 It was the day of the school talent competition and i would plan some characters on laptop.I was feeling excited and nervous.When you mix this two feelings you feel wierd.

 Just before the competition I looked at the other contestants.They looked just nervous as I was.When it was my turn I started normaly but suddenly the electric power went off and all my work was disappeared.I felt confused.

 My friend got on stage and shouted that the general had fallen.The engineer made the electric and I finished sussesfully my work.Suddenly the judges gave me top marks.I felt lucky to had a good friend.

That was the strangest talent competition.

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Remember to use full stops.

Personally, I prefer the spa party because it's relaxing.

Keep in touch.

Be more careful with spelling mistakes!

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I like this https://youtu.be/SzL6Ww7xUWc video because is funy

8 If I were a animal I'd be eagle

11 If I were a momentin time I'd be day

6 If I were a food I'd be souvlaki