Well done, groupo. The ideas are there anyway, be careful about punctuation!


Group, well done!
Be careful about punctuation, spelling and tenses next time!

Next time include a title and some conectors to make a bit longer.

At the party his friends who brought gifts on a bus came and they met and gave him many things

Luciano had breakfast with his parents for his birthday, then he went to wait for the school bus, when the bus arrived his friends gave him a surprise ¡they brought him presents!

One day in the morning, Jungkook had breakfast with his parents while he read the letters they sent him, after that he is went a the bus stop however the bus did not arrive so he saw his watch and he looked that was later for go to school. Next the bus arrive with a surprise for this reason he is happy. Finally he celebrate whit his friends.

On Azkael's Birthday his parents made him breakfast in the kitchen and they gave a gift while he ate and he was very happy. Later he had to go to school and he was waiting for the bus at bus stop but the bus didn't arrive and then he was supried because his friends made him a party on the bus with a lot of music.

Axel woke up to have breakfast with his parents while opening his birthday presents.
He delayed opening his gifts and arrived late at the bus stop ,worried waiting for the bus to arrive suddenly a bus came from with all his friends inside,there was music,and his friends gave him his birthday present,he had a nice day.

Examples of ideas...
1- They were eating brekfast (past continuous) when Askel opened his presents. (past simple)
3. There was a party...

breakfast
kitchen
eat
birthday
parents
bus stop
wait
watch
arrive
worry
bus
friends
music
party